Thread:Jona19992/@comment-5952365-20191010163913/@comment-5952365-20200121032744

Actually you know what? I'll just do it now so we can move on already. Given by what you said above, here's the edit I'll make so it makes actual sense. I'm not going to include what your characters are doing, just mine.

Fangirl111 wrote: The little girl: Adrian, I'm scared!

The boy (Adrian): *Looking around the inside of the truck for a way to escape* Don't panic, everything's going to be alright.

The little girl: Mommy always said not to take candy from strangers, said "you'll get kidnapped", but I never listen.. *Pulls her knees to her chest and wraps her arms around her legs*

The boy (Adrian): *Cups his hands around her face* Hey, it's okay, there's no way you could have known this would happen. Just let me handle this, I got it. *Thinks for a minute* Now listen, when that door opens I'll jump the guy and you run as fast as you can, okay?

The little girl: *Nods, then hugs the boy* Okay, big brother.

The boy (Adrian): *Watches the door, waiting*


 * The boy (Adrian) and little girl suddenly feel very tired. The boy (Adrian) fights it but soon falls asleep. When they awaken they find themselves in a snowy playground. An earthquake starts and the snow shakes away to reveal bones. The boy (Adrian) keeps the little girl calm and a door opens in the sky*

There, better? Now I just need to know how they're supposed to reach the door since it's in the sky, then they can escape, but at least now it makes sense and isn't a jarring scenery change out of nowhere.